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Change: that was speckled with empty drinks, and a sweating silver ice bucket cooling a very expensive bottle of vodka. “I don’t really know, but probably not until the club gets jumping.” Elise answered, refilling her cocktail glass with straight vodka. Elise was having her thirty-second drink of alcohol this week.
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Change: “I’ve been told repeatedly it is because I am young and still have a connection to my humanity. I was turned somewhat against my will.”
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Change: ““Is“Is that so?” He questioned, and he could see her face becoming dreamy and lost, he smiled considering he would be able to taste her after all; if she was able to be glamoured she would no longer be useful as his spy. “I will pull
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Change: He could smell her faded heady perfume, probably sprayed on after her morning shower, there was a residual of the crisp soap she used emanating
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Change: They were one hundred and twelve years into their affair when Pam became restless. She was not blatantly defiant at first; she was well aware
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Change: the Amber waited impatiently for her to tell her what man had sent her these flowers. “Amber, please take these to your desk.” Elise commanded, setting her laptop bag and purse on the desk. “Whaa?” Amber’s mouth fell open. Elise forced a smile, “I can
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Change: “I do, Elise. I’m not done, yet… You cannot have the commission on this lease, but I will offer you the freedom to scout for
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Change: Eric sat alone in his bleak gray office with the door closed; laboring over details to be done for his business. He made small separate
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Change: and stepthat indoor and vanquish her fear of him never coming back. When he left them for the very last time, she didn’t cry, she knew he wasn’t coming back.
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Change: sister.half-sister. The duo was smiling and swinging leisurely on an old green glider on the tiny front porch. Elise distorted her face in distaste at the rusted green glider, “Where did you find that?” “Melly and I went thrift store shopping,
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Change: going to back down in asking for that ten percent commission. Elise swept her heavy wet hair up and into a tightly wound pony tail and used miniscule barrettes to clip back the escaping tendrils. She went into the bedroom and retrieved a
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Change: the man who abandoned her absentas a Father.child. She forced herself to dwell on how she was going to handle asking for the Malveaux’s remaining ten percent as commission for herself tomorrow. She would use it to buy much needed furniture and other furnishings for the house. She
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Change: She leaned over the basin to inspect her face further, running her hand over the smooth planes of her cheeks, remembering how he always left
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Change: beautybeauty. It took more than a pretty exterior to make Eric pause and scrutinize a human, so it was not her face that made him do just that. It was the eyes. Not their emerald color, nor the striking black lashes,
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Change: "With those eyes she reminds me of a cat" -"Med de där ögonen påminner hon mig om en katt""More like a tiger" - "Mer som en tiger" Leave a review or comment on my story in the thread below ◄ Back to True Blood Fan
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Change: graciouslygracefully up the steps to her maker, and stopped short of a step to kiss his knee and run her hand seductively up his leg, caressing him every so lightly, running her hand up his thigh, stomach and resting her hand on his shoulder. “Are they lovers?” “Maybe,
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Change: Eric could have found an inkling of respect for the young Felipe if he had shown he was capable of executing a real plan without
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